Hello Sema. I am here to review your work. The first thing I noticed was the beautiful picture, which was awesome. I noticed there is no spelling errors, and what I liked about it was that you described a beach, but I feel that it was very brief. I suggest that you could expand some paragraphs and add some more detail, because length is important, but not too much. As such, for lack of errors, I rate it 5 stars but length would give it a 2 but I will have to give you 5 stars.
Sema, I like your title. Considering the amount of class time we used, I expected more length. What you have written is very good, but more is needed to help the reader paint a good picture in their mind of your surroundings. You need a concluding sentence (and your last sentence seems a little odd). It seems like you were still going to write more. 18/25
Hello Sema. I am here to review your work. The first thing I noticed was the beautiful picture, which was awesome. I noticed there is no spelling errors, and what I liked about it was that you described a beach, but I feel that it was very brief. I suggest that you could expand some paragraphs and add some more detail, because length is important, but not too much. As such, for lack of errors, I rate it 5 stars but length would give it a 2 but I will have to give you 5 stars.
ReplyDelete5 out of 5 Stars.
-Odin
its to short, it needs to be longer so make it longer
ReplyDeleteSema,
ReplyDeleteI like your title.
Considering the amount of class time we used, I expected more length. What you have written is very good, but more is needed to help the reader paint a good picture in their mind of your surroundings.
You need a concluding sentence (and your last sentence seems a little odd). It seems like you were still going to write more.
18/25