Sema, ** When you post an assignment, be more specific about what you are posting. Your post should state your topic. For example, “Why I am Proud to be Canadian”. ** Use black for your title in formal writing. Use the “tab” button to indent the first sentence of each paragraph. Some punctuation issues (add a space after a comma, not before). Some poorly structured sentences. Using the grammar/spell check would fix some of these errors. Introduction: Your introduction needs to have more than one sentence. Supporting Paragraphs: Your writing would be stronger if you gave more details to support your opinion. You need to write more. In paragraph three you mention “freedom”. It doesn’t fit here. Conclusion: The structure of your conclusion is fine but the sentences aren’t complete. Overall, you followed the structure well but need to support your ideas better. 17/25
Sema,
ReplyDelete** When you post an assignment, be more specific about what you are posting. Your post should state your topic. For example, “Why I am Proud to be Canadian”.
** Use black for your title in formal writing.
Use the “tab” button to indent the first sentence of each paragraph.
Some punctuation issues (add a space after a comma, not before). Some poorly structured sentences. Using the grammar/spell check would fix some of these errors.
Introduction: Your introduction needs to have more than one sentence.
Supporting Paragraphs: Your writing would be stronger if you gave more details to support your opinion. You need to write more. In paragraph three you mention “freedom”. It doesn’t fit here.
Conclusion: The structure of your conclusion is fine but the sentences aren’t complete.
Overall, you followed the structure well but need to support your ideas better.
17/25
Your blog is beautiful, Sema! I love your pictures, and the art! I enjoyed the intergration and I wish you luck on future posts.
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